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  3/21/14    Emily Own Lost World

     “I don’t know how this all happened,” said Emily Andrews sadly.

She was at her toasty warm home in New England, COnnecticut where she could smell the delicious apple pie baking all the way from her gigantic room upstairs. Emily was wearing a white tank top, and blue jean shorts with her hair tied back in a big ponytail with her long dirty blonde hair she loved the deliciously, strong smell of apple pie. It was that time of year when the temperatures can be tremendously high in Connecticut. Today the temperature was 90 degrees Fahrenheit outside. it was very summery outside that people weren’t able to go out without having surplus amount of water with them. While Emily sat in her blue painted room bored out of her mind. Emily had her laptop with a baby blue case in her hands. She was on Twitter at the time because she didn’t know what to do. She was planning an exciting hangout with her friend Serenity Grace.

“I’ve known Serenity for as long as I could remember. She has always been a great friend of mine.”  Emily said while talking to herself.

She kept tweeting and tweeting because she was getting impatient waiting for the scrumptious dessert her mom was cooking to be completed. Emily had a stomach ache the delicious dinner of homemade rice tacos that were better than any taco from Taco Bell that she had ever eaten.
“Emily and Grace come down for dessert.” said mother.

“Ok Mother,” Grace and Emily said.

They all gathered their plates and sat at the table to enjoy the pleasant, warm apple pie that awaited them. Soon after they were seated at the table their father came home from work that gloomy evening.

“Hello father how was your day at work?,” Emily said.

“My day at work was very stressful actually Em.” father said.

“Thanks for being concerned about your fathers day went.” mother said.

“Girls as soon as you are done finishing up the quite delightful apple pie you need to get yourselves settled down for the night because there's a lot to do tomorrow.” said mother.

Everyone was at the table eating their desert socializing while Grace sat quietly without speaking one word. The girls then fell asleep after they were done with the apple pie without speaking one word to each other at all that day.

“Girls it is Saturday morning and we have big plans for today because it is very bright, sunny, and blistering outside this morning.” said father.

“Ok, but do we have to now?” said Grace.

Grace looked like a pile of dirty clothes that morning. Her hair was out of her ponytail and looked like a rats nest. She had gooey slobber all across her face.

“Yes, you and Emily are going to bond today.” her Mother said while passing by Grace’s room.

Emily and Grace’s mother and father had made sure that they had their bathing suits, goggles, and other swimming gear with them while they had their dreadful travel to Myrtle Beach in South Carolina.

“You guys do know that i am not going to interact with Grace at all while we are at the beach.” said Emily.

“Yes, Emily you are going to have to interact with Grace, and you are not going to ignore her at all. We are going to drop you guys off at the because and we are going to your grandmother Suzanne’s house whether you like it or not.” said father.

The drive took quite some time heading towards SOuth Carolina away from their cozy home in New England, Connecticut. Emily decided that she would fall asleep listening to her favorite band One Direction while they traveled to Myrtle Beach. Grace just sat thinking t0o herself why did she have to have an older sister that ignored her. They kept silent the whole ride to Myrtle Beach.

“Were here!” said mother.
“Yay!” said Emily with sarcasm.

Their parents dropped them off and made sure that they had all of their swimming gear with them because they’re going to leave to their mother’s house which is Grace and Emily’s grandmother Suzanne.

“See you later girls be safe while you're out here and socialize with each other,” said father.

They girls then went into the bathrooms where they got all of their bathing suits, goggles and towels with them. As soon as they were both done Emily ran out to the beach without a single care of her younger sister Grace. Grace decided to sit at a bench near the beach just looking at the bright blue water flowing in the quiet winds. Grace’s long blonde hair was whipping along with the wind. Suddenly all Grace heard was completed silence.

Chapter 2

Emily suddenly started to worry about Grace because she wasn’t bugging a single muscle in her entire body. Emily started to run as fast as she could. Emily looked like she was an official track star running at lightning speed. Emily finally reached Grace in a matter of seconds.

“Grace are you ok?” said Emily quickly.

“I’m fine. I just don’t feel like swimming at all.” said Grace.

“Then why did you have to come in the first place?” said Emily snottily.

“Well I’m going to go sit on a rock while you’re here alone I don’t want to disturb the peace.” said Emily.

Grace just ignored her wishing that she could just go away because she was annoyed by her older sister.

“I don’t even know why she is so concerned she doesn’t care about me anyway.” said Grace talking to herself.

A couple minutes passed by and Grace was looking up at the bright blue sky. The sky had only a few clouds that looked like puffy marshmallows. She then took a gaze at the luminous sun in the sky above her. Grace was so bored that she decided that she should make the most of the visit. Grace finally got off of the bench and headed toward the warm waters.

“I don’t want to be anywhere near her. I am going to go further away farther than anyone else” said Grace.

“At least I will be alone like always enjoying my own company.” said Grace.

Grace started to swim rapidly across the beach. She looked up at the sky again only seeing a few birds scattering across the sky freely together. She wishes that this was how her bond was with her older sister Emily. Grace suddenly stopped she realized that she was the only one in the middle of nowhere.

Grace was panicking she didn’t know what to do she was alone like she wished but she never realized she would be remote from the beginning of Myrtle Beach.

“Help! Help! Someone help I am in the middle of Myrtle Beach!” screamed Grace.

Emily thought that she should check up on Grace because it has been about two hours since she had actually seen Grace. Emily got out of the warm water and suddenly got very bone-chilling because of the heavy winds that South Carolina were about to receive. Emily struggled to move very radily because of the high winds. When Emily finally reached the destination that she believed her sister was in. Her sister was nowhere in sight and Emily didn’t feel great at all.

Chapter 3

It seems to Emily that there was one of the greatest storms in South Carolina history was about to strike and she couldn’t find Grace at all she began to sob heavily.

“It’s all my fault I need to find her fast before the storm hits and time soon.” Emily said tears streaming down her face.

Meanwhile, Grace was still in nowhere and she felt useless. She was trying to reach Myrtle Beach but she gave up on herself. She was so close to being near the beach. She could see the beach from where she was at.

“Emily! Emily! Emily! Emily! Help me I can’t swim any longer. Please help me! Please.” said Grace bursting into tears.

“Emily! Emily! Emily! Emily! Please Emily!” shouted Grace.

Emily started to hear someone shouting her name in the distance she turned around to she Grace shouting at the top of her lungs. Emily started to run but it was too late. There was a boat behind Grace that Grace didn’t apprehend  or notice because she was focused on getting Emily’s attention.

“When I opened my eyes, I saw that Grace got swatted by the boat passing by at the speed of light.” said Grace shakily.

Emily was about as far away from one side of a normal classroom to the other when Grace started to slowly sink and drown.

“No Grace I am coming for you. You’ll be safe. Don’t drown.” said Emily.

She finally got a grip on Grace and Emily swam rapidly ashore.
The parents had came to pick up Emily and Grace from Myrtle Beach. They were all crying in the car as they rushed to the hospital. Suddenly Emily’s best friend showed up at the hospital because she had heard about what happened to Grace on her Twitter feed and she wanted to be there.

“I heard about what had happened to Grace. Is she alright?” said Serenity.

“All the information that the doctor gave us was that Grace had a severe concussion to her head which has lead her to a deep coma.” said Emily.

They left the hospital and went back to the beach were Emily took off her shoes and set them by a nearby rock which she sat on thinking to herself.

“Grace is at the hospital now and all we can do is pray that she'll be alright. Serenity just make sure that you never take loved ones for granted like I did.” said Emily.




  3/7/14                             Argumentative Essay #2

Did you know that texting while driving is six times more likely than driving while intoxicated? According to the article, http://www.textinganddrivingsafety.com/texting-and-driving-stats/ Nearly eleven teen deaths everyday come from texting while driving. This is why cell phones aren’t safe.

Cell phones are a distraction to people on the road and off. Cell phones are a distraction because people will stop doing anything  just to answer a text or phone call or even play a game they enjoy dearly. According to the article http://www.dailymail.co.uk/news/article-2276752/Mobile-users-leave-phone-minutes-check-150-times-day.html users check their cell phones or smartphones an average of 150 times during a day of 16 hours, and will not leave their phones for six minutes! According to the study conducted by Dr. James Roberts, in December of 2012 found that “Instant messaging was driven by materialism and impulsiveness.” Some people might argue that you can call you family and friends in an emergency, but most people don’t really know when the right time is to call a family member or a friend, this could lead to horrible car crashes which we don’t want to happen. Cell phones can cause distraction to many adults and teens around the world on the road and off this can lead to accidents.

Cell phones can make you become very sick and you won’t even know it. You can become sick from all of the germs on your phone from talking to (family, friends.. ect). According to the research studies in Sweden found statistically remarkable trends of cell phones increasing brain cancer risks for the total amount of cell phone use since before age 20. According to the article many people can get sick from all of the bacteria in their phones from breathing, coughing, and sneezing which is why most cell phones are crawling with bacteria. Cell phones can lead to illnesses and cancers. Yet many don’t have the effort to clean them.



People say that cell phones create responsibility. Maybe cell phones do create responsibility most people don’t know how to be responsible while using their cell phones. According to the research many kids mostly teens are not responsible with their phones because they use text messaging to bully and torment their victims. Some people might argue that cellphones create responsibility, but if they did people would not cyber-bully on the internet and text messaging. According to the article forty-three percent of teens in the United States are bullied via text message in the past year. In conclusion people say cell phones create responsibility but they don’t because people wouldn’t bully via text messaging or the internet.

Cell phones aren’t safe. Cell phones distract people when on and off of the road and texting or calling can be part of the distraction which can cause most of the accidents in the U.S and other countries. Cell phones can have many germs from coughing and sneezing which explains all of the build up bacteria that you aren’t capable of seeing with a human eye. Last fact is many people aren’t responsible in the ways of use of their phones which is why just last year forty-three percent of the teens in the United States have been bullied via text message. In conclusion, based on the evidence I have provided, cell phones are not safe.

                                       Reflection
The changes I made were that I took out I or I believe because this essay was not about my opinions. So I needed to take out all of those to make it a bit better. I also change up some of the information that I have found.  What I like about my second version it is more precise than my first version. I was better about referring to where my information was actually found. I learned that I need to be more exact when I put information that I find from different sites when putting them into my essay. I also have learned that if you use higher vocabulary your essay may sound like a high quality essay.


2/14/14 Argumentative Essay

2.  Are Cell Phones Safe?

The radiation emitted by cell phones, known as radiofrequency (RF) radiation, is regulated by the Federal Communications Commission (FCC). Hundreds of millions of Americans use cell phones and many of them wonder if there are any health risks.






Did you know that texting while driving is six times more likely than driving while intoxicated? According to the article, http://www.textinganddrivingsafety.com/texting-and-driving-stats/ Nearly 11 teen deaths everyday come from texting while driving. This is why I believe that cell phones aren’t safe.

Cell phones are a distraction to people on the road and off. In my opinion I think that cell phones are a distraction because people will stop anything they are doing just to answer a text or phone call or even play a game they enjoy. According to the article http://www.dailymail.co.uk/news/article-2276752/Mobile-users-leave-phone-minutes-check-150-times-day.html users check their cell phones or smartphones an average of 150 times during a day of 16 hours, and will not leave their phones for six minutes! According to the study conducted by Dr. James ROberts in December of 2012, of Baylor Hankamer School of Business in Texas, found the “instant messaging was driven by materialism and impulsiveness. Some people might argue that you can call you family and friends in an emergency, but most people don’t really know when the right time is to call a family member or a friend, this could lead to horrible car crashes which we don’t want to happen. Cell phones can cause distraction to many adults and teens around the world on the road and off this can lead to accidents.

Cell phones can make you become very sick and you won’t even know it. In my opinion you can become sick from all of the germs on your phone from talking to (family, friends.. ect). According to the research studies in Sweden found statistically remarkable trends of cell phones increasing brain cancer risks for the total amount of cell phone use since before age 20. According to the article many people can get sick from all of the bacteria in their phones from breathing, coughing, and sneezing which is why most cell phones are crawling with bacteria. Cell phones can lead to illnesses and cancers and many don’t clean them.



People say that cell phones create responsibility. In my opinion yes maybe cell phones may create responsibility most people don’t know how to be responsible while using their cell phones. According to the research many kids mostly teens are not responsible with their phones because they use text messaging to bully and torment their victims. Some people might argue that cell phones create responsibility, but if they did people would not cyber-bully on the internet and text messaging. According to the article forty-three percent of teens in the United States are bullied via text message in the past year.In conclusion people say cell phones create responsibility but they don’t because people wouldn’t bully via text messaging or the internet.
I believe that cell phones aren’t safe. Cell phones distract people when on and off of the road and texting or calling can be part of the distraction which can cause most of the accidents in the U.S and other countries. Cell phones can have many germs from coughing and sneezing which explains all of the build up bacteria that you don’t see. Last fact is many people aren’t responsible in the ways of use of their phones which is why just last year forty-three percent of the teens in the United States are bullied via text message. In conclusion, based on the evidence I have provided, I believe that cell phones are not safe.

11/14/14 Reflection on Argumentive Essay

The topic I choose to argue about was if cell phones are safe. I believe that cell phones are not safe. There are many reasons why I think cell phones aren't safe. I learned using your phione too much can have the result of brain cancer. I have also learned that nearly 11 teens die everyday from car crashes that involve texting and/or driving. I noticed all of the different pros and cons of the safety of cell phones. Many of the pros and cons I have found very interesting. I wondered how phones can make pacemakers less reliable.




11/11/13                   Why Stereotype?

Have you ever been the victim of stereotyping, or have you witnessed someone else stereotyping others? Towards the end of my fifth grade year at Riverside Intermediate School. I witnessed people stereotyping a kindergarten girl, and it was time to come to a change.

 It was one beaming afternoon the sun shining brightly on the windows of the yellow school bus. I went very rapidly up the stairs of the bus. I could smell the sweet smell of chocolate. I went to find a seat to save for my friend Brisa and I. A few minutes later she came running faster than a cheetah onto the bus. She seemed very excited.

“Hey Breana,” she said.

“Hello Brisa,” I replied.

All of the kids that went to Washington came onto the bus. They all got onto the bus in a very speedy quick amount of time. We were sitting in our seat that we had always sat in. We look down the aisle and we see Logan. She was wearing her usual Batman jacket, Batman shoes, and Batman backpack that she really deeply loved.

“Brisa! Logan just got on the bus and she sat with her brother Dominic and some other boy that I don’t know by name.” I told her.

“He’s the girl Molly’s younger brother, but I don’t know his name either.” she said.

“Oh, well I am hearing Dominic yelling at him, but I couldn’t hear the conversation clearly. I said.
Then I told my older sister because I needed to find someone to fix it because we found out that he was making fun of Logan because she liked batman and was wearing the jacket, backpack, and the shoes. As we were getting ready to get off the bus my older sister went up the the kid who was stereotyping Logan that she told him to stop because it doesn’t matter what you like or wear as long as she likes it it doesn’t matter. As we were getting off of the bus my sister told the bus driver and he took care of the rest of the ride on as we kept riding the bus it stopped and Logan seemed very grateful.
In the end as we kept riding the bus the stereotyping towards Logan had faded fast. Logan had seemed very grateful that we helped made it stop. Overall the kid learned that stereotyping is no good. Why stereotype? Were all human it shouldn’t matter what we like or wear we are all original, and unique in our own way.


My Reflection On Why Stereotype?

I learned during this writing assessment that it is possible for me to write a personal narrative. I noticed that my personal narrative I've written about me witnessing stereotyping was not a very perfect paper, but I believe it was a very good start. What could happen if we changed the topic? Would I make an even better personal narrative? I liked that when I was typing this personal narrative I did not get off topic to something very off topic, and I smoothly wrote about the topic. In conclusion I noticed that my personal narrative is not perfect, but there are some goods to my personal narrative writing assignment.

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